Theme Writing Winter 2007/8

Theme Writing requires you to keep an ongoing up-to-date record of your work.
This record is useful to show you what you have done andstill need to do. It is also an important record of your participation in the course for grading purposes. Therefore, please take care to make your record of work a fair and proper record of your work. Please add Y for Yes, N for No, or I for Incomplete to update your record of work.

TW Course Information states that minor assignments will be assessed satisfactory (S) or unsatisfactory (NS) based on the following criteria:

*Relevance (work is an explicit response to the task)

*Completeness (work fully satisfies requirements of the task)

*Timeliness (work is submitted by due date according to guidelines for timeliness)

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My teacher's notes on my tutorials

1/7Thesis:Narrow to gynecologists/obstetricians. Define "steps"/controlling ideas:a)Entry requirements (academic & personal attributes),b)Laws to reduce legal liability,c)Laws to improve job conditions (working hours, "on call" availability).Structure:I)Define current situation.II)Problems that directly derive from current situation. III)Possible solutions. Must directly relate to problems.Going well.4/2 Revised WTTO:Suggested a Part I that gives carefully selected details on the aging population and declining birthrate in order to define the wider context in which the shortage of doctors can be clearly identified as a serious problem.Structure:A balance of 55% for Part 1 and II was suggested.This means that Part III recieves the most development (45%) because it is the most important and most interesting part of your answer.Also revisted was the importance of clear connections between solutions-problems-current situation.A sophisticated answer will contain a web of clear connections between its parts.Overall:You are entering a very important stage in which you are aiming to connect all the pieces into a coherent and cohesive answer.You can do it!

1//7 Keep all your work in e-portfolio - drafts, ideas, & assignments.Structure: I)Define characteristics specific to traditional J. employment practice only.II)Problems.Must derive from characteristics defined earlier.III)Possible solutions.Must relate directly to problems.Going well.1/30 Structure/Content:Develop IIC, Connect IIB & IIIB, Develop (new) IIIC, Connect IIC & IIIC. Documentation: Identify and cite all sources of paraphrased information & quotations.Hanako, you continue to meet the high standards you have set yourself and make the consistent effort that TW requires.Going well!

12/7 Narrowed topic:Deaths from AIDS in Japan can & should be prevented. Outline: I.Current situation A,B,C. II.Causes A,B,C. III.Possible solutions A,B,C. IV.Possible objections + your response to solutions.1/16 Structure:Simplify your Working Outline in line with suggested structure above.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument** Thesis:Discussed how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper.The structure above can help you develop a clearer, more structured thesis statement than you currently have.Keep up your good work Miki.1/25 Thesis:Write thesis as one sentence, include controlling ideas briefly & clearly stated in order of importance. Coherence:Discussed again the need for clear connections between parts of your argument:current situation-problems-solutions.Also discussed need not to simply present information, but also analyse and say something about it.Data should really be presented visually to support the reader.Some important changes to be made that can be done fairly quickly & will create a strong foundation for you to develop your paper on. Going well Miki, you are at an important stage.1/30You stated that you wanted to focus on the personal/social aspects rather than the medical health aspects of your topic.Thesis: Rewrite topic & controlling ideas to match your focus. Content:Evaluate relevance of content & connections between A, B, C in parts I, II, & III.Write/rewrite as may be necessary. **Miki, you need to really work on achieving good coherence and cohesiveness.This problem has persisted a little too long.** 2/6 We essentially went over again the need to define your key ideas, develop them fully, and create clear connections between them in order to achieve a coherent and cohesive argument.

1/16 Reported a change of topic to compulsory English edn. at elementary level and you had developed a clear, well structured thesis and outline.Discussed the problem that your supporting reasons were not new, and therefore are really only repeating what others have already said on a long discussed topic.You will come to tutorial again soon after reconsidering your situation.1/21 Structure:I.Current situation A, B, C. II.Problems A, B, C. III.Possible solutions A. 'Media literacy' education in schools B.Dual programming streams - information & entertainment C.Diversified program rating scheme This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument** Thesis:Discussed how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper.The structure above can help you develop a clear, specific thesis statement.You need to define this topic clearly.You will post your revised thesis and outline soon.Thank you Mari.

1/30 You need to catch up on feedback for Minor 4 & 5. Think carefully what it means for you,plan how you will move forward, and what writing/rewriting is needed. Rina,you have been 'missing' for some time and you will need to renew your efforts. The next week is very important for you.I hope to see you OH or tutorial soon.Thank you Rina.2/1 Introduction: Simply, briefly define 'new Japonism' - the idea & that this is your own term.Thesis:Topic= impacts of 'new Japonism' on traditional Kabuki. Your position=effects are mostly positive. Controlling ideas -state the reasons for your position briefly,clearly.Aim for a single sentence thesis statement.Structure: Overall structure of revised WTTO seems OK,but with controlling ideas not currently present in your thesis, it is not possible to evaluate whether the details are clearly relevant.Content:The brainstormed collection of questions are key ideas/issues that I felt your paper in its current state does not answer or does not answer sufficiently.Overall:You need to work really hard to achieve a coherent & cohesive answer Rina, it IS possible providing you dedicate yourself to the task.

1/16 Suggested structure:I)Define the problem A,B,C. II)Causes A,B,C. III)Possible solutions A,B,C. This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument**Looking good Yohei.

1/16 Suggested you simplify structure:I)The overall problem II)Current solutions A,B,C III)Problems (with current solutions) A,B,C. IV)Alternative solutions A,B,C.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.It will also moderate against your topic becoming too BIG in the context of this assignment.Thank you Minako,going well.1/28 After reading your paper, your current thesis does lack an issue.The closest I believe you come to stating your thesis appears to be the very last sentence of part IV.Please be sure that when you come to next tutorial that you have a really well developed thesis (topic, your position, and your controlling ideas) and also that you have given thought to what follow on structure and content changes need to be made that almost always follow changes to the thesis.Thank you, see you soon Minako.1/30 Your latest work has produced a very positive outcome. Thesis:It now defines an issue and makes a claim that is controversial and can be argued.However, think whether 'neutral' really defines your position. Structure: Part I & Part II directly relate to your thesis and clearly connect to each other.Part III needs to be revised to directly connect to Part II, to Part I, and to your thesis.Minako, I really like your willingness to think deeply, your paper shows much promise.

1/16 Structure:I.Current situation A, B, C. II.Problems A, B, C. III.Possible solutions A,B,C. Simplify your Working Outline in line with suggested structure above.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument** Thesis:Discussed how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper.The structure above can help you develop a clearer, more specific thesis statement than you currently have.Thank you Marina.

1/9Thesis:Claim needs stating more fully, more clearly.Mention reasons that support your claim as controlling ideas in your thesis.Structure:I)What the situation is.II)Identifiable problems.III)Possible solutions.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.Keep up your good work.1/26 First Draft:You need to revise your thesis to clearly state your controlling ideas. You should also mention them in order of importance.Part I Current Situation will be revised to provide only details that are relevant background to controlling ideas A, B, C.Part II will be revised to deal only with each of the problems in the order they are mentioned in your thesis.**Please use sub-headings, and even third-level headings to help you decide the appropriate location for supporting details.I asked that you work on these changes quite soon so that a firm foundation is established on which you can develop your paper.Post your revised paper to your eportfolio and come along to tutorial or OH soon.Thank you Izumi.

1/9Thesis:Topic & thesis needs to be resolved quickly, time is passing.Structure:Discussed a diagram showing how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper.You will discuss your topic and possible claims for your thesis with friends over lunch.You plan to see me again Friday OH/tutorial time.

1/18 Thesis:Discussed how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper:This paper will argue that corporate behaviour in Japan is too frequently immoral and unethicall because a)?, b)?, and c)?.Structure:I)What the current situation is A,B,C.II)What the problems are A,B,C.III)Possible solutions A,B,C.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.You are working well and making some important progress, good Nozomi.1/23 First Draft: Thesis requires 3rd controlling idea restated as a reason that supports your position.Part I Current Situation will be revised to provide only details that are relevant background to problems A, B, C. You will post a revised paper to your eportfolio by 10am Thursday 1/24.Your progress is very positive Nozomi.

1/9Thesis:Assumption underlying claim is not one that many people would agree with.Claim needs rewriting to be made more reasonable.Controlling ideas are present, but some could be stated a little more fully, more clearly.Structure:I)What the current situation is.II)Identifiable problems.III)Possible solutions.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.You are working well and making some important progress, good!

1/7Thesis:Still missing controversial claim/contention that can be discussed/argued. Structure:I)Define situation.II)Identify problems.III)Suggest possible solutions. **Solutions must relate directly to problems, problems must relate directly to the characteristics that define the current situation.These connections will ensure coherence & cohesion.Trying hard to catch up, good.4/2First Draft/Revised WTTO:Some lack of work at the beginning of the semester and over the last three weeks has put your success under doubt.You have the ability.You also have a structure to support a convincing argument.You can do it,but you will have to devote a lot of effort.Thank you Ikumi.

1/25 Thesis:Write thesis as one sentence, include controlling ideas briefly stated.Introduction: Add more relevant background prior to stating focus of paper. Strengthen focus statement.Structure:I)What the current situation is.II)Identifiable problems.III)Possible solutions.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.Use sub-headings & third level headings when needed to make structure clear.Going well Kanako.

1/18Thesis:Discussed how the thesis controls the content and structure of the paper:This paper will argue that the case of the working poor in Japan is an emerging and serious problem because of a), b), and c).Suggested structure:I)What the current situation is A,B,C.II)What the problems are A,B,C.III)Possible solutions A,B,C.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument.An important topic that has probably been too long ignored Shunsuke,you have a good opportunity to inject new ideas and issues into the debate on the 'working poor'.1/23 Working outline: The controlling ideas in your thesis need stating in order of importance.One controlling idea needs restating as a personal or social effect.You will revise the order of ideas in parts I, II, & III to follow the order in which your controlling ideas are stated in your thesis statement.With these changes your thesis and outline are very sound.Shunsuke,you now need to put good energy into writing your first draft.4/2 First Draft:The key word in comments attached to your paper is RESEARCH.You have a structure to support a convincing argument. However, without sufficient evidence integrated into each paragraph your paper cannot qualify as academic writing.Meeting this requirement is crucial for you.You can do it, but you will have to devote much more time to your paper than you have to date. Thank you Shunsuke.

1/9Tutorial:Absent. 1/11Tutorial:Absent 1/29 I returned Minor Assignments 3, 4, & 5 with written comments. 1.Thesis:Needs to include topic+ your position+(v. briefly) your reasons for your position. In your thesis these reasons are your controlling ideas, which control key parts of the content and structure. 2. Suggested structure: I)What the current situation is A,B,C.II)What the problems are A,B,C.III)Possible solutions A,B,C.**This basic organisation will help you create clear connections between all parts of your paper and help you produce a coherent and cohesive argument. 3.Relevance: Highly recommended you focus on Japan. Some comparison to US is OK, but be careful that the balance of paper is connected to Japan. 4.Balance: Currently your paper is mostly summary. Your overall task is to say something new on your topic, this will require you to critical examine current issues & ideas & offer a fresh perspective. Some really important work over the next week or two is required. Thank you Yasutake.2/6 Content:Thesis includes only one controlling idea (obesity).This point was noted when we discussed your thesis and a possible structure in the previous tutorial.You need to identify two more main problems (i.e.your controlling ideas).This is crucial for you to be able to develop your paper.You will need to work extremely hard on your paper in the time remaining. Thank you.

1.Scratch Outline. Due: 12/10 M

Y S:Complete, relevant qs. To focus on 3 main problems is probably enough, good.

Y S:Complete.Relevant qs.Good topic.Your thesis needs to define the issue/problem specifically.Also,what will you say that is new?

Y S:Complete.Relevant qs.Current issue, good.Thesis could be clearer, needs rewriting.

Y S:Complete, relevant qs. Interesting topic.You need to define the issue/problem more clearly though.What will you say that is new?

Y S:Complete. Think about your thesis: What is the issue/problem that you will discuss?What will you say that is new?

Y S:Very complete. Recommend you focus on ~3 main problems only. So you need to group related questions.Then organise them to show main points & supporting ideas.What will you say that is new?Good start.

Y S:Current topic. Possibly a good choice.However a lot has already been written on this topic, the real challenge here Minako will be to say something new, and avoid simply repeating what others have already said.

Y S:5 qs. missing, but seems sufficient to develop into full outline later. Thesis needs work.

Y S:Complete, qs. relevant & thoughtful. Thesis needs to express your position clearly.

Y NS:Missing. Due 12/10 Posted 12/13.Possibly a good topic,but in its current form it is missing an issue or problem to be discussed - it is needs to be more than 'about Christmas' - what will you say that is new? I recommend you look at this very soon.

Y S:Relevant qs.Organisation needs more thought. Thesis:Good topic.Be specific about the issue/problem you will discuss and your position on it.

Y S: Very complete. Thesis assumes there are problems.Some people would deny this.Issue needs rewording so it can be discussed. Recommend you focus on ~3 main problems only.What will you say that is new?

N NS:Missing. Due 12/10

Y NS:Missing. Due 12/10 Posted 12/12.Very important,current issue.Organistation needs some more thought.Your challenge will be to see the problem fresh perspective & offer new, thoughtful solutions drawn from your analysis.

Y S:Complete, relevant, thoughtful questions.Interesting issue.

Y S:Somewhat under developed in terms of no. of qs. Also, what is the issue/problem that you will discuss?

2.Working Bibliography. Due: 12/12 W

Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

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N NS:Missing. Due 12/12

Y NS:Not complete - missing 2 sources.

Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you

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Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you

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3.Research Proposal. Due: 12/17 M

Y S:This is clearly an issue that affects us all.Marie,currently your thesis is missing a clear statement of your position, and that should also include some possible solutions to the problems.Your solutions would be drawn from your earlier analysis of the problems.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y S:Hanako - This paper focuses on current problems in labor market and suggests possible solution to improve labor market in Japan - currently your thesis is missing a clear statement of your position.In addition,the critical challenge for you is to say something new, in terms of the problems & the possible solutions, so that you do not simply repeat what others have already said.An aspect that might interest you is the unique problems Japanese women face under traditional employment practices.Lastly, 'employment system' and 'labor market' do not mean the same thing.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y S:Miki - Therefore, it should be realized again that everyone has a possibility and be needed to act personally and positively - currently your thesis does not state the topic or your position.Try to define the topic by defining the problems that cause it.Your position can be defined by the possible solutions to the causes of the increase in AIDS cases in Japan.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

* S:Firstly Mari,I still feel you need to define the issue more clearly.What is the name of the problem/issue?Secondly,I am concerned that your topic may be too 'big' and needs narrowing further.One way to do this is to focus on Japan, particularly as you have more authority to discuss the issue in your society than in societies that you may not have sufficient experience and understanding of. This would be especially important when suggesting possible solutions because they are like to very context sensitive, i.e. a solution that might work in the US might not work in Japan, and vice versa.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

* S:Very nice,I think you will have other readers visit your portfolio & read & comment on your views.Always keep in mind that you want to say something new on your topic, be careful that you do not simply repeat what others have already said. Looking very good at this stage Rina, keep going.

Y NS:Yohei - This paper will explore the reason why many Japanese people have depression and the number of Japanese people is increasing - currently your thesis is missing a clear statement of your position, and that should also include some possible solutions to the causes of the problem of high levels of depression among Japanese people.Your solutions would be drawn from your earlier analysis of the causes.In addition,the critical challenge for you is to say something new, in terms of the causes & the possible solutions, so that you do not simply repeat what others have already said.Also,your proposal is incomplete, it does not indicate what research has been done so far.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y S:Minako,I have a question for you - Japan should emphasize realism over ideals, and deploy SDF to Iraq to support US and UN activities by the Anti-terrorism Special Measures Law that supposedly will be passed in the Diet at the beginning of the next year - if the law is to be passed which may indicate reality has succeeded over ideals, then what is the actual problem or issue?Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

* S:The purpose & your thesis will become more specific and clearer as you research.Clearly you are headed in the right direction Marina, good!

Y S:Your purpose & thesis could be strengthened even more Izumi, especially as your claim seems to be that 'juku' is actually damaging to children.You are clearly headed in the right direction, good!

* NS:You are correct I think that there is an issue here. However, at this stage Yuta, your thesis does not clearly, specifically define what the issue is.I am not sure that you really know yourself how to explain it yet.It is important that you do think on this and be able to explain the issue clearly.Also, your proposal is incomplete, it does not indicate what research has been done so far.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y S:Nozomi,I am very much looking forward to reading the reasons you give that explain why corporations that know that certain acts are immoral & unethical & will put the public's health at risk, but still do it anyway.A very interesting topic.Going well.

* S:Noriaki,you need to have a think about your thesis - The nuclear power plant and its reprocessing plant do have environmental and political problems - in its current form your thesis does not contain a claim or assertion that says anything new.This problem needs to be your priority before you go further.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y NS:Ikumi,you currently do not have a thesis.This does not make a claim or assertion -This paper will focus on where the difference of behavor on greeting come from.This problem needs to be your priority before you go further. What new claim can you make? Also, your proposal is incomplete, it does not indicate what research has been done so far.It seems a topic that may actually be difficult to research, but of course that depends on what claim you will make in your thesis.Post your updated thesis to your e-portfolio & please let me know so I can check it for you.

Y S:Thoughtfully organised Kanako, you include all the required details.I am very pleased with your choice of topic. Homelessness is an important issue, and one that much more needs to be discussed in Japan, unfortunately it is a situation that too many societies, including my own, can turn a blind eye to.

* S:Shunsuke,this looks a very nice topic.The critical point is that you say something new, so that you do not simply repeat what others have already said.Looking very good at this stage though, keep going!

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4.Working Title/Thesis/Outline. Due: 12/19 W

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. You may need to narrow your topic even more, I think your outline tries to cover too much ground for a paper of this length. Could you focus on one prefecture or even just one city and to illustrate the extent of the problem Japan-wide? I would also recommend reworking what you have done into a basic three-part structure. You can innovate on this and develop it more later, if needed: I. What is the current situation? II. What are the main problems? III. What are the possible solutions? This organisation can also be instructive for developing a clearer, more structured thesis statement.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. This is clear and the basic structure is sound. I suggest you narrow down the details to only the very most relevant so that the solutions relate directly back to specific problems and that the problems clearly relate to specific features or characteristics that define the traditional employment system. Currently, I think your outline includes too much detail for a paper of this length, ~10 paragraphs or so only.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you.Miki, this is a very positive effort. I think your outline could be simplified to reflect the basic tasks you have set yourself: I) Define the current situation/problem II) Identify the main causes III) Suggest possible solutions. You do need to be sure that each section is clearly connected to the one preceding it, i.e. that the causes clearly relate back to the problem, that the solutions clearly relate back to the causes. This organisation will also be instructive for you to develop a clearer, more structured thesis statement.

* S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. My comment on your Research Proposal expresses a concern that calls for a major change to your thesis, which would follow on to your outline. This is important Mari, you have a thesis that makes a claim or assertion that most people already are very likely to agree with. What is it about this topic that you can say that is new? It should be a claim or assertion that is somewhat controversial (unlike your present thesis), so that there is an issue that can be discussed. Please update me soon.

* S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. Rina, I think your outline could be simplified to reflect the basic tasks you have set yourself: I) Definition of “Japoniseme” II) Analysis of positive and negative effects III) Evaluation (define your position). This organisation can also be instructive for developing a clearer, more structured thesis statement that indicates your position. As well, you can innovate on this structure and develop it more, if need be, later.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you.Yohei, you have developed an attention-grabbing thesis, however, it should indicate the controlling ideas you will discuss in the body of your paper. Also, I think your outline could be simplified to reflect the basic tasks you have set yourself: I) Define the problem II) Identify the main causes of the problem III) Suggest possible solutions. You do need to be sure that each section is clearly connected to the one preceding it, i.e. that the causes clearly relate back to the problem, that the solutions clearly relate back to the causes.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you.My comment on your Research Proposal expresses a concern that might call for a major change to your thesis, which would follow on to your outline. You should update me soon Minako.

* S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you.I would recommend reworking what you have done into a basic three-part structure. You can innovate on this and develop it more later if required: I. What is the current situation? II. What are the main problems? III. What are the possible solutions? This organisation can also be instructive for developing a clearer, more structured thesis statement.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. I would recommend reworking what you have done into a basic three-part structure. You can innovate on this and develop it more later if required: I. What is the current situation? II. What are the main problems? III. What are the possible solutions? This organisation can also be instructive for developing a clearer, more structured thesis statement.

* S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. My comment on your Research Proposal expresses a concern that calls for a major change to your thesis, which would follow on to your outline. This is important Yuta, you do not have a thesis. What is your new claim or assertion on the meaning of Christmas in Japan? Please update me soon.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. I would recommend reworking what you have done into this basic three-part structure: I. Causes II. Effects/Problems III. Possible Solutions. You do need to be sure that each section is clearly connected to the one preceeding it, i.e. that the effects clearly relate back to the causes, that the solutions clearly relate back to the problems. Your progress towards an effective thesis was much more strongly demonstrated in your Research Proposal; here it is lacking clarity and structure - do not undo your good work.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. My comment on your Research Proposal expresses a concern that calls for a major change to your thesis, which would follow on to your outline. This is important Noriaki, you do not currently have a thesis that makes a new claim or assertion about nuclear energy in Japan. In other words, your planning indicates that you intend write ‘about nuclear energy’, however, the goal of your paper is to offer a fresh perspective and new ideas on the issue. Please update me soon.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. This shows strong development on your Research Proposal - good! You have a thesis, but is this an original claim or is it the view of someone else? Have you been able to find sources? At this stage, the availability of sources is central to whether this is 'doable', or not. 3/1 Update Please publish your new WTTO to your e-portfolio Ikumi, it is better all your work is there. Now, you are closer to a good topic, but there are two main things: 1) Thesis: You have a thesis that makes a claim or assertion that most people already are very likely to agree with. What is it about this topic that you can say that is new? It should be a claim or assertion that is somewhat controversial (unlike your present thesis), so that there is an issue that can be discussed. I would also recommend you select an issue that connects your topic to Japan. 2) You do need to be sure that each section is clearly connected to the one preceding it, i.e. that possible solutions clearly relate back to the problems, & the problems are clearly drawn from your analysis of the current situation.

Y S: Compete, relevant, & on time - thank you. Your thesis here is quite different from your Research Proposal thesis, but that difference is not reflected in your outline here. This outline is best suited to addressing the previous version of your thesis, not this one. Working on this outline and your previous thesis then, I would recommend simplifying this outline into a basic three-part structure: I. What is the current situation? II. What are the main problems? III. What are some possible solutions? You can innovate on this and develop it more later, if required. For example, it would not prevent you from critically examining homelessness abroad to gain a fresh perspective on the problem in Japan and its possible solutions. This organisation can also be instructive for developing a clearer, more structured thesis statement.

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5.First Draft (750+). Due: 1/19

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*N NS:Not submitted by 1/26.Received 2/6.

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*N NS: Not received by 1/26. Received 2/2.

*Y *S:Your feedback is available at tutorial.

6.Revised Working Outline. Due: 1/26

Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

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Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

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*Y S:Relevant, complete, & on time - thank you.

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7.Works Cited. Due: 2/2

Y NS: Please pick up from ILC 275.Numerous mistakes, not complete. ->Course Information ->AWR pages or links Compare your work & revise carefully.Try to show me your revised version.

*Y NS: Please pick up from ILC 275.Numerous mistakes, not complete. ->Course Information ->AWR pages or links Compare your work & revise carefully.Try to show me your revised version.

Y* S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

Y* S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

Y S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

N* NS:Not submitted. Due 2/9

Y S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

Y* S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

Y S:Please pick up from ILC 275.Corrections needed.Relevant, fairly complete, & on time - thank you.

N* NS:Not submitted. Due 2/9

Y* NS: Please pick up from ILC 275.Numerous mistakes, not complete. ->Course Information ->AWR pages or links Compare your work & revise carefully.Try to show me your revised version.

N* NS: Due 2/9. Submitted 2/16. Numerous mistakes, not complete. ->Course Information ->AWR pages or links Compare your work & revise carefully. Returned to you in class 2/18 or pick up later from envelope outside ILC 275.

Y* S:Submitted 2/9. Complete, relevant, & on time. Thank you.

Y NS: Please pick up from ILC 275.Numerous mistakes, not complete. ->Course Information ->AWR pages or links Compare your work & revise carefully.Try to show me your revised version.

N* NS:Not submitted. Due 2/9

N* NS:Not submitted. Due 2/9

8.Full Draft (1500+). Due: 2/9

Y

Y*

*N NS: Not submitted. Due 2/16

Y*

Y*

*N NS: Not submitted. Due 2/16

Y

Y*

Y

*Y NS:Due 2/16 Submitted in class 2/18. 2/19 Follow-up email (paper has no clear thesis).

Y*

*Y S:Submitted 2/16. 2/19 Follow-up tutorial

Y

*Y NS:Due 2/16 Submitted 2/17 I read & made comments on your paper & returned it to you in class 2/18.

*Y NS:Due 2/16 Submitted 2/17 Follow up tutorial 2/19

*N NS: Not submitted. Due 2/17

9. Final Paper. Due: 2/21

234

379

013

524

020

054

065

094

135

160

161

198

280

332

432

466